In my mother’s more angry and disillusioned moods, she often declares that my sisters and I are “smarter than is good” for us, by which she means we are too ambitious, too independent-minded, and somehow, subtly un-Chinese. At such times, I do not argue, for I realize how difficult it must be for her and my father—having to deal with children who reject their simple idea of life and threaten to drag them into a future they do not understand.
For my parents, plans for our futures were very simple. We were to get good grades, go to good colleges, and become good scientists,
mathematicians, or engineers. It had to do with being Chinese. But my sisters and I rejected that future, and the year I came home with Honors in English, History and Debate was a year of disillusion for my parents. It was not that they weren’t proud of my accomplishments, but merely that they had certain ideas of what was safe and solid, what we did in life. Physics, math, turning in homework, and crossing the street when Hare Krishnas were on our side—those things were safe. But the Humanities we left for Pure Americans.
Unfortunately for my parents, however, the security of that world is simply not enough for me, and I have scared them more than once with what they call my “wild” treks into unfamiliar areas. I spent one afternoon interviewing the Hare Krishnas for our school newspaper—and they nearly called the police. Then, to make things worse, I decided to enter the Crystal Springs Drama contest. For my parents, acting was something Chinese girls did not do. It smacked of the bohemian, and was but a short step to drugs, debauchery, and all the dark, illicit facets of life. They never did approve of the experience—even despite my second place at Crystal Springs and my assurances that acting was, after all, no more than a whim.
What I was doing when was moving away from the security my parents prescribed. I was motivated by my own desire to see more of what life had to offer, and by ideas I’d picked up at my Curriculum Committee meetings. This committee consisted of teachers who felt that students should learn to understand life, not memorize formulas; that somehow our college preparatory curriculum had to be made less rigid. There were English teachers who wanted to integrate Math into other more “important” science courses, and Math teachers who wanted to abolish English entirely.
There were even some teachers who suggested making Transcendental Meditation a requirement. But the common denominator behind these
slightly eccentric ideas was a feeling that the school should produce more thoughtful individuals, for whom life meant more than good grades and Ivy League futures. Their values were precisely the opposite of those my parents had instilled in me.
It has been a difficult task indeed for me to reconcile these two opposing impulses. It would be simple enough just to rebel against all my parents expect. But I cannot afford to rebel. There is too much that is
fragile—the world my parents have worked so hard to build, the security that comes with it, and a fading Chinese heritage. I realize it must be immensely frustrating for my parents, with children who are persistently “too smart” for them and their simple idea of life, living in a land they have come to consider home, and yet can never fully understand. In a way, they have stopped trying to understand it, content with their own little microcosms. It is my burden now build my own, new world without shattering theirs; to plunge into the future without completely letting go of the past. And that is a challenge I am not at all certain I can meet. 点评Comments:
1.This is a good strong statement about the dilemma of being a part of two different cultures. The theme is backed by excellent examples of the conflict and the writing is clear, clean, and crisp. The essay then concludes with a compelling summary of the dilemma and the challenge it presents to the student.
2.A masterful job of explaining the conflict of being a child of two cultures. The writer feels strongly about the burden of being a first generation American, but struggles to understand her parents’ perspective. Ultimately she confesses implicitly that she cannot
understand them and faces her own future. The language is particularly impressive:“It smacked of the bohemian,” “subtly unChinese,” and “a fading Chinese heritage.” That she is not kinder to her parents does not make her unkind, just determined.
I guess it was inevitable that I’d be on hockey skates at some point in my life, but I did not expect that I’d become one of a rare group of female ice hockey officials before I even reached high school. Being born into a family of hockey players and figure skaters, it seemed that my destiny had already been decided.
Right from the beginning, my two older brothers and my father strapped me up and threw me onto the ice. I loved it and, in my mind, I was on my way to becoming a female Gretzky! But my mom had to think of something fast to drag her little girl away from this sport of ruffians. Enter my first hot pink figure skating dress! That was all it took to launch fifteen years of competitive figure skating. Even though figure skating soon became my passion, I always had an unsatisfied yearning for ice hockey. It took a great deal of convincing from my parents that competitive figure skating and ice hockey didn’t mix. My compromise became refereeing ice hockey; little did I know that I was beginning an activity that would influence my character and who I am today. When I began, I would only work with my dad and brothers. Everyone was friendly and accepting because I had just started. I soon realized though that to get better I needed to start refereeing with people I wasn’t related to, and that’s when my experience drastically changed. An apologetic smile and an “I’m sorry” wasn’t going to
get me through games now. As I began officiating higher-level games and dealing with more arrogant coaches, I suddenly entered a new male-dominated world, a world I had never experienced before. My confidence was shot, and all I wanted to do was get through each game and be able to leave. Sometimes I was even too scared to skate along the teams’ benches because I would get upset by what the coaches would yell to me. “Do you have a hot date tonight, ref?” was a ment that coaches would spit at me during the course of a game. In their eyes, I did not belong on that ice, and they were going to do whatever they could do to make sure no women wanted to officiate their games. I was determined not to let them chase me off the ice.
I made the decision to stand up for myself. I never responded rudely to the coaches, but I did not let them walk all over me and destroy my confidence anymore. I started to act and feel more like the 4-year certified Atlantic District Official that I am. There were still a few situations that scared me. One time I called a penalty in a championship game during the third overtime and the team I penalized ended up losing because they got scored on. I knew I had made the right call, even though I was unnerved when I saw the losing teams’ parents waiting for me at my locker room; for the moment I wished I hadn’t called that penalty. Although it was scary at the time, I stood my ground and overcame my fears. That was an important
stepping-stone in my officiating career and in my life.
After four years of refereeing, I still can’t say it’s easy. Every game hands me something new and I never know what to expect. Now I have the confidence and preparation to deal with the unexpected, on and off the ice. I now also know take everything with a grain of salt and not let it get to me. I have learned that life is just like being out on the ice; if I am prepared and act with confidence, I will be perceived as confident. These are the little lessons that I’m grateful to have learned as a woman referee.
Things to Notice About This Essay
1. The author tells an interesting story about her experiences as a referee.
2. A sense of her personality—determination, flexibility, good humor—comes through in the narration.
3. Details like “Do you have a hot date tonight, ref?” make the narration memorable (we’d love to hear more of these kinds of details).
4. The essay needs a faster start. The first paragraph (three sentences) says the same thing in both the first and third sentences—and gives away the essay’s surprise in the second! A good revision would all of paragraph one and start at paragraph two.
5. There’s too much frame here and not enough picture. The essay needs further development, especially about the difficulties of
becoming and being a ref, to keep it vivid.
6. The author should “dwell” in the meaning of the experience a little more at the end—“I wonder about…I also think…Sometimes I believe….” Significant experiences like this one, woven through many years of the author’s life, don’t mean just one thing—there are more insights and lessons to explore here.
尊敬的系学生会：
我是计科本二班的学生王建华，现申请加入学生会学习部。小时候曾许下了很多很多伟大的承诺：我要当工程师，我要当警察，我要当老师，当我现在是个大学生的时候，我的梦想是加入学生会为同学们服务，我要锻炼我自己并且服务号他人，之所以我还喜欢天蓝色和银白色，它代表着我要飞向天空。我身高172是一个性格外向的人，所以我很喜欢读书，各种书都喜欢。另我喜欢看动漫，动漫中有很多的经典，我尽情遨游在书的海洋中，在这里也希望交到和我拥有同样爱好的你。我爱好运动，这个爱好导致我的性格外向，大大咧咧的，喜欢和人打交道，我爱好很多运动，篮球、排球、足球、乒乓球、羽毛球都是我所热爱的，我为系里在这些球类运动上还争得了很多的荣誉，这是我的努力付出收到的回报，也是我为系里贡献的成果。
通过一年的大学生活，从生活和工作中，我学会了怎样为人处世、怎样学会忍耐，怎样解决一些矛盾，怎样协调好人与人之间的关系，怎样动员一切可以团结的力量，怎样处理好学习与工作之间的矛盾。这一切证明：我有能力胜任学生会的职务，并且有能力把学生会发扬光大。
假如我成为学生会中的一员，我要进一步完善自己，提高自己各方面的素质，要进一步提高自己的工作热情，以饱满的热情和积极的心态去对待每一件事情;要进一步提高责任心，在工作中大胆创新，锐意进取，虚心地向别人学习;要进一步的广纳贤言，做到有错就改，有好的意见就接受，同时坚持自己的原则。假如我成为学生会中的一员，我将以“奉献校园，服务同学”为宗旨，真正做到为同学们服务，代表同学们行使合法权益，为校园的建设尽心尽力。在学生会利益前，我们坚持以学校、大多数同学的利益为重，决不以公谋私。努力把学生会打造成一个学生自己管理自己，高度自治，体现学生主人翁精神的团体。
我知道，再多灿烂的话语也只不过是一瞬间的智慧与激情，朴实的行动才是开在成功之路上的鲜花。我想，如果我当选的话，一定会言必行，行必果。请领导给我一个施展才能的机会!?
我自愿申请加入学生会学习部，这对于我来说是一次鞭策与提高，也是对我的一次锻炼和考验，我申请加入这个组织，并力争为学校教学管理做出自己的一份贡献。我认为学习部的责任很大，它是学院的重要管理组织，不仅担任学院学生会对学生学习的监督检查督促等职能，更能激发学生的学习热情，使他们养成良好的习惯，使学生的精神面貌发生新的变化。因此，它对于促进学生的管理工作有着重要的意义。可以说学习部是学院管理工作的重中之中，是管理之基，是服务之本，因此我申请加入这个组织。
如果我加入这个组织，我将感到无上光荣，我将严格要求自己，模范遵守学院各项纪律和规定，对照标准找差距，使自己的自身素质的提高，认真履行学习部所赋予的职能，充分发挥其监督，检查，管理的职能，坚持标准面前人人平等，不搞小团体，不逊私情，秉公办事，一切为了学院的发展，一切为了学院的管理，一切为了学生的利益，并把自己置身在学院学生会这个集体中，找准位置，服从组织，听从安排，在学校管理中，做出自己的贡献，并在管理中提升自己的能力，激发澎湃的热情，端正学习的态度，树立远大的理想，树立正确的人生观，价值观，珍惜时间，刻苦学习，做遵守纪律的榜样，做认真学习的榜样，为学院实现更大的发展，为学院创造新的辉煌做出自己的贡献，我将从现在起向这一目标奋进，请学院领导批准我的请求各位老师：
两千多年前庄子说：“吾生也有涯，而知也无涯”。意思是，人生是有限的，但知识是无限的。人的一生都是一个学习的过程，而学生会则为我们提供了一个弥足珍贵的学习的机会。学生会感受着时代的脉搏，和全体同学同呼吸、共命运，使我们火红的青春中的一个无限精彩的舞台。在学生会的日常工作中可以学到求实精神;在对困难处理中，学会人格的伟岸;在相互交往中学到道德的执著;在活动中学到工作方法。
系学生会，是现在学院中的组织结构之一，是学生自己的群众性组织，是学院联系学生的桥梁和纽带。学生自觉接受学生会的领导、督促和检查，积极支持学生会的各项工作。它的基本任务是：遵循和贯彻党的教育方针，促进同学德、智、体全面发展，团结和引导同学成为热爱祖国、适应有中国特色社会主义现代化建设事业要求的合格人才;发挥作为党和学校联系同学的桥梁和纽带作用，在维护国家和全国人民整体利益的同时，表达和维护同学的具体利益;倡导和组织自我服务、自我管理、自我教育，开展健康有益、丰富多彩的课外活动和社会服务，努力为同学服务。
而学习部作为学生会的一个分支，除了具有以上所说的学生会的优点外，还具有自己独具的特点：以提高同学们学习意识、营造校园学习氛围为目的，开展各种同学喜闻乐见的活动。了解反馈广大同学在学习方面的意见和要求，在师生之间搭起一座桥梁本站整理，促进师生的相互交流，协助教师共同探讨我系教改新方向。
在学院范围内营造良好的学习氛围，促进我系优良学风的的形成，具体工作如下：
1。 严抓学习纪律。
2。 开展学术性活动。除了在校艺术节期间举办较为大型的学术活动外，另根据本校的专业特色和实际情况，开展各类学术性活动。
3。 加强师生之间的沟通与了争，做好“教”，“学”双方的信息反馈工作，配合我校教改的顺利进行。定时了解并解决学生中学习上的问题，协助有关部门抓好学风建设，参加“评教”活动，积极反映学生对学校教学、教育工作的要求和意见，并及时向教务处反馈。
4。 提高学生会的整体成绩与学习兴趣。并抓好本班和全校的学习情况。
5。 进行各班间的学习经验交流，与老师的沟通。
此致
敬礼!
20__年_月_日
敬的各位学长学姐：
你们好。
我是来自文法x班的史艳梅，在这里我申请加入我们学习部。
首先，请允许我做一下自我介绍。我是一个平凡的女孩，但是我不甘于平庸。我性格比较活泼，随和，能和同学们很好的交流沟通。我办事认真严谨，对工作负责。在高中时代，虽然学习很紧张，但是我仍然担任班级学习委员并兼任英语学习课代表，很好的完成了老师安排下来的任务。通过一些学长学姐的介绍和自己的一些了解，我对于大学有了一定的认识。大学不再像我们高中时期那样，除了学习还是学习，而大学相对自由的时间比较多。在经历高中三年的默默学习之后，我希望可以在大学收获一些不同以往的经历与经验，所以在这里，我再次郑重的申请加入学习部。
其次，谈一下我对于学习部的认识，学习部作为学生会的重要部门之一，肩负着组织和管理学生，丰富同学们的课余生活，促进同学们各方面的发展。学习部始终以“创造良好的学习环境，全面提高广大学生的综合素质”，为同学们努力营造一个良好的学习氛围，为实现大学生高素质，高文化的目标而奋斗，学习部通过各种形式的活动使广大同学对学习更有兴趣，带动同学的学习热情，丰富同学的业余生活。大学，虽然学习不是要做的事情，但是作为学生，我们的首要任务就是要把学习搞好。而现在的很多同学们，很多的时间都用来逛街或者上网等等一些琐事上，浪费了宝贵的大学时光。所以，在这样的情况下，学习部的作用也就日益重要了。
也许我了解的并不够，但是我始终是怀着一颗真诚的心，来看待我现在所做的的事情，来了解这个部门，咱们学习部的主要任务有组织新老师生交流会，加强新老生的交流，促进新生尽快适应大学生活。定期开展到课率的查询工作，营造良好的学习风气。举办各种知识讲座。丰富校园文化，提高学生素质。举办各种朗诵、征文比赛以及趣味知识竞赛，为广大同学提供一个展示自我的平台。我已经认真了解了我们的任务，我有信心并且有能力完成安排下来的每一项工作。
在我们入学的时候，是学生会的学长学姐们，不求回报的帮助了我们，从火车站到宿舍的接待，让我非常感动。我希望我也有机会能帮助下一届学弟学妹们。
加入学习部，在服务同学的同时对我自身也会有很大的帮助。首先可以促进我自身的学习，为大家做出一种表率。在组织参加各种活动的同时，对于我自身也是一种锻炼。在与同学，同伴的交流合作时，能够使我的视野更开阔，知识更丰富，使我接触更多的人，增强我的交际能力和办事能力。
如果我有幸能成为咱们学习部的一员，我一定加倍努力，以学习部为平台展示我的能力发挥我的创造力和想象力来更好的完成我的工作，脚踏实地的去对待每一件事情，增强责任意识。也会充分发扬团队精神，积极的参与、组织各种形式的活动，和同学共同进步。即使最后，我失败了，我也不会灰心丧气，这次竞选本身对我来说就是一次很好的锻炼机会。我会找出自己的不足，更加努力，让自己做的更好。我再次郑重的申请加入学习部，希望组织给我一个机会。
此致
敬礼!
申请人：
尊敬的团委老师：
您们好!
我是来自﹡系﹡级﹡班的﹡﹡﹡。现在我要申请﹡﹡学院学生会文艺部部长一职。
阳光向上，积极乐观是我对自己的评价。我想，拥有这一点，是要竞选文艺部部长最基本的一个条件。然而我知道，拥有一个乐观的心态并不能胜任文艺部部长一职，更重要的是热情、能力和责任心，还要有愿意为大家服务的决心。
不知不觉中在学生会生活和工作的时间已经有一年了，对文艺部的各项工作都有了深入的了解。学生会作为在我院团委直接领导下学生组织，它是联系老师和同学的沟通的桥梁，而文艺部更是在构建这个桥梁必不可少的一块砖，在各个大型活动中都要有文艺部的身影，文艺部不仅给大家带来欢乐，丰富大家的业余生活，并且在文艺部举行的各大活动中，也给同学们创造一个展示自我的平台。在文艺部这个大家庭教中，我学会成长，我也变得更加成熟，不管在工作方面还是为人处事。在文艺部工作的一年多的时间里，我深刻的认识到团结、协作是文艺部成员最应具备的精神。 回顾这一年，部里的每项活动我都积极参加，让我的日常生活更加充实，文艺部在这一年里举办很多有质量的晚会，有水准的比赛，同时我们和学生会其他部门积极合作共同完成学生会的工作。这些工作，让我的经历变得更加丰富，是我的能力得到更好的锻炼，让我能够更好地处理人际关系，能够更出色的完成其他工作任务。
加入文艺部是兴趣的指引，而热情是我竞选部长的最大优势。过去的一年在老师的指导下，学长学姐的帮助下以及同学们的协助下我逐步熟悉并了解了文艺部的工作，先后参与了很多的活动，提高了自己的工作能力，与同学之间的配合也越来越来默契，与文艺部以及其他部门的同学建立了深厚的友谊和关系，在工作方面得到了来自他们的大力帮助。从进入文艺部起，我全力协助部长的工作，与全体文艺部成员一起将文艺部凝聚成了一个团结向上的集体，并加强与学生会其他部门之间的联系与配合。
我来竞选文艺部部长，因为我相信我的勤劳刻苦，相信我的努力进取之心，我希望把我的全部的热情以及自身日益增长的组织办事能力投入到文艺部的工作中去。假如我当选了文艺部部长一职，首先我会保质保量的完成团委老师、主席团发放的任务。其次，我会多思考，努力完善各大型活动的方案，让同学们枯燥的学习生活中多一些欢乐。并且在例行事务上尽量做到优化、精简化、高效化，加强与其他各部合作，以我们共同的热情、责任心以及能力，带给大家一个全新的学生会。也给自己一个展现自己、锻炼自己的舞台。 如果我没有当选文艺部部长一职，我也不会气馁，我会继续努力，全心全意尽自己最大的努力为同学服务。
希望团委老师能批准我的文艺部部长申请
此致
敬礼!
20xx年x月x日
